At once we stepped, one foot
In front of the other
Into a world we did not understand,
Looking but not seeing the hidden riddles
Beneath mounds of snow-covered sand
Go back to your pillow, yes
Close your eyes
Pretend and deny what you will;
Your foolishness has granted you
Plausible deniability but left you a hefty bill
Partake of the poison, sweet
Malignancy of the vine
We are vagrants, you and I
Pushing our way across the tundra,
The remains of a discontented sigh
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I like the imagery in this one, particularly the snow-covered sand and the malignancy of the vine. Nice job
Oz-approved! What else could I ask for?
Thank you!
My pleasure
The last line…has such deep story within it…so much said..bravo!
And the very line I struggled over the most… thank you so very much for that
I can feel the emotional chill from here.
You had me at “feel”
Oh… ok.
I just meant that it’s great when somebody feels something from one’s words
Gotcha!
Love it.
“We are vagrants, you and I”
Nice.
So glad you enjoyed this one
Thanks for stopping in and commenting.
I always love your poetry but never know what to say…
You just said it
thank you dear Julie!
This blew my mind.
Thank you Posky – I love your blog and your artwork
Thanks.
There is a lot of poetry drifting around on blogs and it’s nice to see something of an elevated standard.
Wow, that was absolutely amazing. You had me captured from the first line.
And you just made my day! So glad you enjoyed it and thanks so much for your lovely comment.
Ooh, I feel a little chilly after reading this one, but in a good way.
It’s funny because it suddenly turned cold here after being in the 70s – maybe the nip in the air inspired this one??? lol
So you’re the one to blame for the light snowing falling outside my window, huh? Not cool, Sheila.
You have snow???? wow…I bet it’s pretty!
Well, it’s melting as soon as it hits the ground, and the sun is now coming out, so luckily, it won’t linger. Phew.
Love the plausible deniability line. Your poems have some kick ass imagery. Do you do haikus?
Thanks so much for that!! I have tried haiku and failed miserably…. not my thing
I love the idea of lost or hidden things that are usually right there in front of us. Very beautiful poem. It reminds me a little of Wordsworth or some of the more old fashioned poems.
Sometimes we don’t see what’s there, do we? Thank you for your kind words
Hmm, I don’t think this one is about the snow on the sand!
Short and sweet, and good as always